The Miami Herald confirmed the rumored Justin Timberlake and Jay-Z tour in its article on Thursday. I wanted to write a positive blog post about the Herald's article. However, it fell short of my expectations.
The article was separated into seven short sections. I call them sections because each one is not long enough to be considered a paragraph. Each section was well written and followed all the journalistic grammar rules or AP Style. The problem was the article was so brief.
This piece is the newspapers top story for music in the entertainment section. This piece is so short, I would not consider it to be an article. I am sure there are longer more entertaining articles that are worthy to hold the title of top article. Not only is the piece lackluster and brief, it is also dated. This story is at least three days old.
In order for newspaper organizations to stay in business, it is helpful to embrace their online presence. This being said, it is important that it updates it's online content regularly. A top article that is three days old is not helping to bring positive attention to their online presence. However, the photo that accompanies the article is fantastic.
In this candid photo both artists look happy to be on stage together performing at the Grammys'. The background provides contrast and the audience's arms add context to when and where the photo was taken. My issue is, it was not taken by anyone on staff at the publication that ran this photo. I find it strange that no one in the Herald had any photos to use to accompany this piece. It also dates the article as well. It almost feels as if the photo was chosen because both Jay-Z and Justin Timberlake was in it.
The content of the article is all grammatically correct. However, the middle two paragraphs have a style error that I do not care for. It follows a layout of, then this happened and this happened. I have been taught ways to avoid writing in that manner. I am sure journalists with professional training know how to avoid writing in that context.
The last paragraph in the photo above is attempting to present ideas as facts to add hype to this tour. It is in the best interest not to over generalize statements when they may not be true. The wording used as well make it seem that the author is unsure of what he or she is saying. Words such as may or could provide uncertainty and reduce the validity of the piece.
The article also tries to add too much information in such a short story. This article is supposed to be about confirming Justin Timberlake and Jay-Z's tour together. It is important that the author included ticket sales and when the concert is. I do not find adding information about Beyonce's concert to the article important. It does not benefit the article, it appears as a filler.
I do enjoy Jay-Z's music and was excited about reading any news regarding him. This article fell short of my expectations.
The article was separated into seven short sections. I call them sections because each one is not long enough to be considered a paragraph. Each section was well written and followed all the journalistic grammar rules or AP Style. The problem was the article was so brief.
This piece is the newspapers top story for music in the entertainment section. This piece is so short, I would not consider it to be an article. I am sure there are longer more entertaining articles that are worthy to hold the title of top article. Not only is the piece lackluster and brief, it is also dated. This story is at least three days old.
In order for newspaper organizations to stay in business, it is helpful to embrace their online presence. This being said, it is important that it updates it's online content regularly. A top article that is three days old is not helping to bring positive attention to their online presence. However, the photo that accompanies the article is fantastic.
In this candid photo both artists look happy to be on stage together performing at the Grammys'. The background provides contrast and the audience's arms add context to when and where the photo was taken. My issue is, it was not taken by anyone on staff at the publication that ran this photo. I find it strange that no one in the Herald had any photos to use to accompany this piece. It also dates the article as well. It almost feels as if the photo was chosen because both Jay-Z and Justin Timberlake was in it.
The content of the article is all grammatically correct. However, the middle two paragraphs have a style error that I do not care for. It follows a layout of, then this happened and this happened. I have been taught ways to avoid writing in that manner. I am sure journalists with professional training know how to avoid writing in that context.
The last paragraph in the photo above is attempting to present ideas as facts to add hype to this tour. It is in the best interest not to over generalize statements when they may not be true. The wording used as well make it seem that the author is unsure of what he or she is saying. Words such as may or could provide uncertainty and reduce the validity of the piece.
The article also tries to add too much information in such a short story. This article is supposed to be about confirming Justin Timberlake and Jay-Z's tour together. It is important that the author included ticket sales and when the concert is. I do not find adding information about Beyonce's concert to the article important. It does not benefit the article, it appears as a filler.
I do enjoy Jay-Z's music and was excited about reading any news regarding him. This article fell short of my expectations.